可以帮我看一下文法吗？

cheesheng

When one door of the happiness closes, another opens; but often we look so long at closed door, that we do not see the one which has been opened for us....

有语病吗？可以帮我看看吗？
谢谢咯～

chingfong85

让我试试看。。

When one door of the happiness closes, another opens; but often we look so long at ｔｈｅ　closed door, that we ｆａｉｌ　ｔｏ　see the one which ｉｓ　ｗｉｄｅｌｙ　ｏｐｅｎｅｄ....

麻糬

第一句的When one door of the happiness closes, another opens
不是要用被动式吗？be closed, another be opened
如果one door 改成a door会不会比较好？

yen1988

原帖由 cheesheng 于 29-10-2007 03:11 PM 发表
When one door of the happiness closes, another opens; but often we look so long at closed door, that we do not see the one which has been opened for us....

有语病吗？可以帮我看看吗？
谢谢咯～

When a door of happiness is closed, another door will be opened but as we often stare at the closed door, we can't see the door which has been opened for us.

你也可以试试别的句子 ：

When there is a will,there is a way.

We can only gain if we let go the past.

rioj

其实你想表达什么？你的“Door of Happiness” as a metaphor 有点不切贴。