麻烦英语强手进来~~~(帮帮忙pls)

大地之子G.O.B

U r LIKE A STAR shine my life,U BRING ME JOY,
I like to say I❤U,IF we can meet,but this ❤ is DIFFERENT,
CAN U HEAR ME?

我要表达的大概是，你就像颗星星照耀我的人生，你带给我欢乐，
我要/想对你说我爱你，如果我们能够见面/我能看见你，但这份爱是不同的，
你听得见吗？

请问语法上哪里需要修改的？

换个说法，我是想要用u bring me joy，if，can u hear me，like a star，i love u，different来造一组意思大概像上面这样的短语。

麻烦高人提点，感激不尽

James-Yeo

U, is an alphabet.
我不知道你那麼愛 U 的... ...

大地之子G.O.B

U, is an alphabet.
我不知道你那麼愛 U 的... ...
James-Yeo 发表于 15-7-2011 03:45 AM

除了u我还喜欢F,C,K

美丽的雨天

You are my shining star,
you brighten my world,
you bring me joy.

If we could meet each other one day,
I would like to tell you, I LOVE You.....
However, this Love is special...
Can you hear my heart?

大地之子G.O.B

You are my shining star,
you brighten my world,
you bring me joy.

If we could meet each other ...
美丽的雨天 发表于 24-7-2011 09:33 PM

谢谢回复。

我是想要用u bring me joy，if，can u hear me，like a star，i love u，different来造一组意思大概像上面这样的短语。
所以你给的不是我要的，不好意思
而且，签名也放不到这么多字，除非用小字。
无论如何，还是谢谢你

美丽的雨天

U r LIKE A STAR who brighten my life,U BRING ME JOY,
IF we can meet, I want to say I❤U,but this ❤ is DIFFERENT,
CAN U HEAR ME?

哈哈。。没事啦，我也是闲着无聊没事做才随便写写。。。帮不到你，不好意思哦。

大地之子G.O.B

U r LIKE A STAR who brighten my life,U BRING ME JOY,
IF we can meet, I want to say I❤U,but t ...
美丽的雨天 发表于 24-7-2011 10:04 PM

没什么，谢谢你

meiluting

Like a star, you light up my life ; you bring me joy.
I want to tell you that I love you when we meet up one day, even though this love is different.
Can you hear me?

大地之子G.O.B

You are my shining star,
you brighten my world,
you bring me joy.

If we could meet each other ...
美丽的雨天 发表于 24-7-2011 09:33 PM

谢谢回复。
请看5楼

niff

应该不是用different吧，是用special

大地之子G.O.B

应该不是用different吧，是用special
niff 发表于 28-7-2011 04:15 PM

可是我要的是different.....