谁可以帮我指出这篇blog里的错误？

xbadx

我的英文不是很好，想通过写blog练习英文
如果你有时间，请帮我改一下，或者指出其中的错误，多谢先

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Why I Like Warm Girls?.


My lecturers and classmates often ask me what kind of girls I like. I always tell them I like warm and soft girls.

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1st of all, I am quite old already and since my father’s gambling, my family only has a weak finance foundation.
After my graduation, I no need to pay any debts, but all my fortune will have to be built by the bare hands of myself.
It will be many barriers we have to overcome together, and it will only be overcome if we really love each other.
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2nd reason has to be traced, when I was still young, my mum and dad fought for their divorce.
A sentence mum always liked to say, was that she had many other choices before, why she was so blind and had chosen my dad.

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I don’t think this sentence has hurt my father a lot, both of them are used to hurt each other.
Nevertheless, mum’s words moved me a lot, though I am neutral on their dispute: maybe a little bit more stand on my mum’s side.
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My feeling is when a girl or a boy inside a relation always wants to be expensive, always remind themselves “I have other choices.” Their relation cannot go very far. When some difficulties accrued, ‘difficulties always accrued in a relation, it is life!’ none will have the patient to stand for a while and try to think out an idea to overcome these difficulties, therefore, they will always quarrel and experience many splits.
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I like warm and soft girls, but the warmth I like is not that she told all her friends she liked some guy, but is more about to like to be with me together.
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I wonder why sometime a girl refused to sit with a guy in class but told her friends that she liked that guy.
And why sometimes a girl in the church told everyone she liked a guy, but after talked no more than 2 sentences she just ran away.  I can understand a girl should be shy and passive in some culture, but it also makes the guy also doesn’t know how to start, even if he has the same feeling.

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I think a relation is more of a private matter.
When keeping private, we will have more time to gradually know one another, whether we feel one another interesting, whether we have the common language, whether we can bare one another’s weaknesses.
And couple, because we really love and enjoy being together.

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My mum and dad’s lives are quite a tragedy for both of them, and me.
Their not divorcing which has only made things even worse.
Last time when VU management asked me why it was the 3rd time my tuition had not been paid on time, I called back to China and asked my mum to help to remind my dad.
My mum told me, she could not help, though they still lived under the same roof, they did not speak more than 3 sentences to each other a day.
And I knew it was true.

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That is also why I am so much into reading family relation books and hoping my marriage life will be better.

(thanks for your reading)

Summer_kaze

有些不懂你要表達wat東東
如有錯不要見怪..use it at your own risk!!

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Why do I like warm-hearted Girls﹖

My lecturers and classmates often asked me what type of girls do I like. And I always replied them
that I like warm-hearted and tender girls.

First of all, I'm quite old now and since my father started gambling, my family somehow has some financial difficulties.After graduating, I need not to pay debts anymore. However, all my own fortunes still have to be built up with my own bare hands.There will still be many barriers that we must overcome together. It can be overcome if we really love each other.

The second reason has to trace back when I was still young, my mum n dad fought over their divorce. My mum used to say that she used to have many other choices before but why she was still so blind and had chosen my dad.


I dont think this words had actually hurt my father a lot though. Both of them are very used to hurting each other often. Nevertheless, my mum's words had also moved me a lot, though I am neutral in their disputes. Perhaps I'm a little more on mum's side.


My feeling of a girl or a guy who is in a relationship always wants to be superior,kept reminding themselves " I could have better choices" Their relationships might not go very far.When there're some problems arose, "roblems always arise in one's relationship. That’s life”. Some of them might not have the patience to stand a while and start thinking for better solutions to overcome all these problems. Therefore, they will always start quarrelling with each other and in the end may even split up.

(????) I like warm and soft girls, but the warmth I like is not that she told all her friends she liked some guy but is more about to like to be with me together. (????)

I wonder why sometimes a girl could refuse to sit next to a guy in class and yet telling her friends that she liked him. And why does sometimes in church she told everyone she liked a guy but after talking for not more than few words she just fled away.
I could understand that a girl should be shy and conservative in a certain extent but this could also causes the guy doesnt know how to start approaching, even though he had the same kind of feeling. \

I think a love relationship is more of a personal matter.
While keeping it personal, we could have the time to gradually know each other more, no matter how we feel each other interesting, no matter both of us had mutual understanding, no matter we could live on with each other's weaknesses.
And being a couple, we really love and enjoy being together.

My mum and dad's life has been really miserable for both of them and me.
They did not divorce and made things even worse.
Previously when the VU management asked me why it was the 3rd time my tuition fee had not been paid on time.
I called back to China so as to let mum remind dad about the matter.
My mum told me she could not help it even though they lived under the same roof.
They did not talk to each other much for some days.
And I knew it was true.


That is also why I am so much into reading family relationship books and hoping my future marriage could be much better.
(Thanks for your reading)

[ 本帖最后由 Summer_kaze 于 13-4-2008 04:20 AM 编辑 ]

xbadx

多谢帮助改正，改的真好，比我写的好多了

后面一段是这样的，有几次有几个女生跟朋友说喜欢我
我很感动，但是她们总是很害羞，所以弄到我也不知道怎么开始

但是我也不想说是我，因为blog很多同学在看
我可不想通过这些事炫耀自己，或者伤害到人家

所以后面一段很难写，我也是觉得很难

多谢帮助改正，改的真好，比我写的好多了，再次感谢

Summer_kaze

改了第2次，希望不会误人子弟
红色那段真的要华语才明白你要讲什么东东。