谁能帮我改改这篇blog

xbadx

感觉自己的英文写的比较啰嗦，大意是mini bus本来从学校接人以后，应该去ktm，但是为了多赚钱
mini bus从pyramid又开回学校，因为放学时间乘客比较多。这样打算去ktm的人就都会浪费20分钟跟着兜圈子。但是想想如果不让司机兜圈子，他们赚不到钱，bus会更少吧，也许等车的间隔会变得更长。让他们兜一次圈子也许未必吃了很大的亏。

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Practice some Forgiveness

I usually take Mini Bus 66 back to KTM after school.
Once day, after taking us from the college, passing by Sunway Pyramid, rather than go to KTM, the bus turned back to Sunway College again.
Since it was just after school, quite a lot of students waited to go to Sunway Pyramid.
It was profitable for the bus driver, but for the few people wanted to go to KTM, there will be another 20 minutes totally wasted.

My bus mate on the day, was a happy Indian.
She argued in another way.
It would waste us 20 minutes.
But if we complained the bus driver made the mini bus become less profitable, we would have less bus to take, and much longer interval to wait.
And if we tolerated the bus driver once a while, maybe we didn’t lose anything.

It was true, further more the bus driver usually would mention in Malay, that the bus will not go to KTM, so we can just get down and wait for anther bus to KTM, there were more bus to choose before Pyramid.

[ 本帖最后由 xbadx 于 25-12-2007 04:48 PM 编辑 ]

Summer_kaze

懂你要表達什麼﹐可是有點詞不達意﹐grammar mistakes...
如果是個人預料的情況可以多用 could,would,might ,seem to etc